I provide feedback on the strengths and weaknesses of your script, mainly in the form of questions and suggestions regarding characters, scenes, overall plot structure, mood, pace, themes, and motifs, along with general notes on how the script compares with other, similar narratives, with an eye toward the contributions your script makes to the pop culture landscape.
For instance, in terms of character, I read with an eye toward the kind of first impressions they make, the clarity and consistency of their motivations and goals, the tenor of their relationships and conflicts with other characters, and in general how compelling and fully realized they seem. Likewise, in terms of plot structure, I critique the general premise of the script, the nature and resolution of the central conflicts, the emotions it elicits, the distribution of exposition, any parallels or contrasts established, and for television pilots, I also provide notes on the script’s potential for establishing subsequent episodes and plot arcs. Depending on the script, I might suggest adding scenes that seem to be missing, cutting scenes that seem unnecessary, trimming scenes that could be tightened, or expanding scenes that would benefit from more breathing space. I provide similar sorts of feedback on mood, pace, themes, and motifs.
For spec scripts for existing television shows, I also provide feedback regarding how well the script accords with the existing show, including qualities like episode title formatting, adherence to the shows’ conventions and style, how well it captures the characters’ voices and behavior, and for comedies, suggestions for punching up jokes.
I’ve spent years analyzing and critiquing a wide array of television series and films, and have become adept at clearly and constructively articulating my sense of what does and does not work in a script, and why. I will devote myself to your vision, and offer my thoughts on how to better achieve it. After all, it’s always useful to view your own writing through fresh eyes, and my eyes come with years of experience, appreciation of diverse forms of entertainment, and high standards.
I provide highly detailed line-by-line notes on your script, along with general notes on specific characters, scenes, and the structure, mood, pace, themes, and motifs of the plot. Notes come in the form of questions, suggestions, and copyediting. The extent of the notes varies depending on the length and quality of the script, but an hour pilot might average six pages of single-spaced notes, including two-to-three pages of line-item notes, and three-to-four pages of general thoughts on the strengths and weaknesses of the various aspects of the script.